Some of my writings

Here ya go, "Cookies" in an LJ entry.

http://www.livejournal.com/users/bluie2323/82892.html#cutid1

Haha...I think I hate it now, I've been working with it too much.

Ah crap.....here's the rest of it

http://www.livejournal.com/users/bluie2323/83063.html#cutid1

*brain explosion*

That was... deep. Wow. Well written, but the formatting does need a bit of help, if only to help separate when scene changes happen. Other than that, no real complaints. And it does show a lot of talent when someone who detests masculinity as I do would actually sit through any story involving two men, let alone scenes with two brothers. You've got something going with this story, don't give up on it.

However, publication-wise I have no clue who you could sell this to. I'm thinking most mainstream publishers wouldn't want to touch something like this with a stick. Maybe stuck in between other similar stories in a compilation, some that aren't quite so controversial? Do you even have anything like that?


Still, very well done, and I enjoyed the story. Huzzah!

-AG

Thank you very much! I'm actually embarassed that I wrote it, coming to think back on it...but thank you!

I know, I have problems with my form...I don't like how most books are layed out, and I don't like how stories look when you lay it out correctly, so I just do my own thing. I realise that sometimes, especially with my style, that it gets confusing.

Yes, I was thinking of a story compilation! I have some other works that I've been editing forever, and most of them I'm thinking of just scraping and re-writing completely. I know that this type of story is not something that most people would even want to hear exists, let alone read it. I guess I was hoping that if someone read it, and liked it, they would be more open toward the subject matter of it, and in turn, more open to the way society in general is becoming. I don't mean to say that society is turning gay and screwing thier brothers......but I mean, with the legalization of gay marriage and all that stuff. I don't understand what people's problems with it are exactly, but I'm getting off topic.

I have another that I'm still in the process of writing called "Red Hotel" that has some of the same controversial subject matter tha "Cookies" does, but I don't know if it could be considered more than surface pulp fiction, you know? It doesn't tap in to the mindsets of the characters as much as Cookies did, so I don't know if it would really strike emotion in a reader. Man, can I babble or what! Anyway, thank you again for your comments on Cookies, I'm really happy to hear you liked it!

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faith wrote:

eh, here's one that needs help...lots.

http://www.lerman.biz/asagao/bakahanashi.html

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I just have to ask: is that glue trick based on any real-life practice? *flicks flecks of dirt off of face* *eyes wander over to glue*

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well, I don't know if it's a practice, but it has been done before. By an 11 year old child who saw their friend doing it to a doll ^^

...Or who thinks they saw their friend doing it to a doll, but really can't remember...O_o

faith wrote:

I remember that story from your days at the other forum, along with the Schwarz lungenfrigen or whoever it was called (lol)

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Good eye, good eye. I didn't think anyone noticed that one.

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yes, it is a very trippy story indeed >_< but I do like it. You have an easy style to read, if the thing's a bit confusing without knowing the title beforehand.
Can I borrow your lungen picture and advertize it as a new toy on JRWN?

faith wrote:

Can I borrow your lungen picture and advertize it as a new toy on JRWN?

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Sure, go for it

I started beggining a new story, so as soon as i finish i will post for comments! whee

Here's a teaser so to speak of my new story, "Red Hotel". I'm only about a quarter of the way through, so I hardely put anything up, and actually I don't think there's much content in it that mmoves the plot. But that's good, cause then you'll all read it when it's done right???

It's told by Plum, Sumi is his twin brother, Yukii is thier uh....caretaker. Tanoshimu na

http://www.livejournal.com/users/bluie2323/84240.html#cutid1

are these brothers like the other brothers?

-AG

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Yes.

Yay! I finally finished my super small short story: This Diary. If you want to read it Go here: www.cianide.blogger.com
Enjoy!
(Its kind of fast moving and crappy, but oh well)
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Gaa make it work!

Hey the URL thingie broke on me!