Some of my writings

Discussion in '-off topic-' started by AdamG, Aug 23, 2004.

  1. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 11:01 am

    I'm looking into becoming a writer professionally, and much of the advice I've gotten from other writers is to simply write, write everyday, then write some more.

    While I have a couple long form story ideas I'm working on for hopeful publication, I'd like to throw out my 'practice' site, a blog that only contains posts of me writing stories or monologues. None of these stories are pre-planned. I simply sit down and write, then edit for spelling/grammar mistakes but nothing further than that.

    Warning, this site may suck:

    http://sanityedge.blogspot.com/

    If you comment, would you mind telling me who you are, even if the comment is "Dude, you suck" or whatever. I just like to know who's telling me what.


    -AG
     
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  2. RedMetallicTears -member- -member-

    RedMetallicTears
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 11:24 am

    I'll try to check it out, I have such a short attention span that I got past a single paragraph v.v
    But it's pretty damn good, IMO. Especially compared to my stuff. (This is excluding my fanfics, it's sacred compared to those stupid stories me and my friends write)
     
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  3. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 11:32 am

    Those with short attention spans should probably skip the first story and head towards the others. While much more disturbing, they're also much shorter. I dont' usually hit 3000 words on that site but this morning I was inspired... or something.


    -AG
     
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  4. faith -tea party- -tea party-

    faith
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 12:24 pm

    yes, I am of those with short attention spans >_<

    About the fish story...I was talking to my friend once and she brouht up an interesting point about why Gackt is an ok lyricist, while Dada's stuff is much more interesting *she doesn't like either*

    There are certain accepted images, like guns and beer, and fishing, and they've come to mean certain things to different cultures. If you stick with these images as they are, then you don't have any innovation. The real interest comes when these symbols are paired together in new combinations, or used to stand for things that they normally would not have.

    Your story is good, but may lack that certain something that sets it apart from all other stories. That's just my opinion. I'm sorry. I'm not writer because my stories just suck...don't listen to me -_-
     
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  5. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 1:21 pm

    Don't worry, the story wasn't meant to mean anything. Or if it was I don't know what it was. That story also suffers due to the fact that I've never been fishing or on a boat, never shot a gun, and that I'm very allergic to alcohol. That story was literally me writing what I don't know. I guess that's why they say to write what you do know.

    Thanks all for reading and commenting so far, like I said this is just me practicing and isn't meant to become any great work of art or anything, I don't mind criticism at all :)

    -AG
     
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  6. Bluiechu -member- -member-

    Bluiechu
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    Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2004 5:01 pm

    I'm looking to become a published writer as well! I mostly just write novelettes though....I've been called a sessionalist (I think it was the context rather than my writing...though my biggest fan, as she has dubbed herself, says my style is very complicated), among other not so nice things for what I write. >.> I dunno WHY.

    Annnyway, I have a suggestion, it might be your style though. I find that "he said/she saids" get in the way of the flow of the words. When you have to read them, I find you have to make a pause in the line, and then when you pause, it's a perfect time to get a snack, or turn the TV on vowing you'll come back later but you never do. I try not to use any at all, but I write mostly from first person, and just replace the character's thoughts with the "he said/she saids"...I don't see why it wouldn't work in third person either, come to think of it. Another reason not to use them is because then people start skipping over them, and then they start skipping over lines, and only read the dialogue....that's a waste of writing.

    I dunno, maybe give it a try and see how it comes out....Like I say, it could just be your style, and it works, since what you write is short, you don't have to deal with it a lot. I hope I help and not just mindlessly blabber :lol:

    Good luck to you!
     
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  7. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 12:58 am

    Could you give me a small example of what you mean? When you describe it it's slightly confusing but I'm sure seeing it I'll understand what you mean.

    -AG
     
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  8. Bluiechu -member- -member-

    Bluiechu
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 7:16 am

    Okie, here's a sample from one of my novelettes, "Red Hotel"

    “Sumi, Sumi.” I lightly ran my fingers over his face, chasing a stray strand of hair behind his ear, his skin shivering slightly in sleep.

    See, he's saying "Sumi Sumi", and you know it's him and not someone else saying it, because it;s followed with his train of thought and action. But you don't have to say "He said", and follow it with the action. I hope that made more sense? :)
     
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  9. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 10:45 am

    Ahhh, gotcha. I could possibly use that here and there but I think I've been raised too much on the traditional dialogue style to use it constantly. I'm a whore for classic literature. I like the style though, I just don't think I'd be able to do it right :D

    New story added, it's easy to follow even if you don't watch baseball. And yes, my protagonists will almost always be female.

    -AG
     
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  10. Bluiechu -member- -member-

    Bluiechu
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 7:27 pm

    And my protagonists will almost always be male....I wonder if it's a guy/girl thing?
     
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  11. Cianide -member- -member-

    Cianide
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 7:41 pm

    Great stories! I write myself as well, I'm not half as good as you (and most people). I try. Once I started a novel and got halfway done...but I lost it in a computer crash T_T. It was about 130 pages, which is alot to me.
     
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  12. AdamG -member- -member-

    AdamG
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    Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2004 11:49 pm

    Cianide wrote:
    that is a lot, and incredibly tragic.

    When I get started on my novels I'm going to work it like such:

    Writing on PC/Palm Pilot, backing up on both systems, emailing hard copies to myself for extra backups and transferring more backups to my modded FTP server XBOX.

    Hopefully I can delay/kill any possible ruination of my stories, heh.

    I appreciate the compliment on my writing, but I'm curious to see what you write. We do write on message boards, and rather a lot, you have to have some skill, dear.

    Bluiechi - are you female? I find most people hate writing the opposite gender but I prefer to do it that way. Of course, I know why I do it but that's neither here nor there :D

    -AG
     
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  13. faith -tea party- -tea party-

    faith
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 12:28 am

    dude. Let's all be sharebears and post our stories somewhere so we can help each other out :grin:

    Then we can make a book "the scape stories of mystery, mayhem, and beercans" (I've got those in mine too) and become famous and then Mana will fall in love with all of you and it will be wonderous. Wadja say?

    ...really though, let's all post our stuff? Mine needs major help.
     
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    flowersofnight
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 12:43 am

    Let it never be said that you didn't ask for it.

    Recovery and Reupholstering

    Originally posted while impersonating someone on LJ, but it stands well enough on its own. :cool:
     
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  15. Cianide -member- -member-

    Cianide
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 2:19 am

    flowersofnight wrote:
    You have a wonderful writing skill! I liked that story/journal entry.

    I'd post some of mine...but, I need to write a new story haha ^^;; I had another crash. I'm too lazy to make backups and their not even worth it, so why the bother? I think of short stories as ways to improve your skill and focus. (I have ADD lol so its hard for me to remember where I'm going with the story and usually ending up a completely twisted version) XP
     
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  16. faith -tea party- -tea party-

    faith
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 2:33 am

    I remember that story from your days at the other forum, along with the Schwarz lungenfrigen or whoever it was called (lol)
     
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  17. Bluiechu -member- -member-

    Bluiechu
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 7:23 am

    AdamG wrote:
    Yes I am female! I prefer to write the opposite gender as well, but I think that's one of the main reasons for my subject matter being tagged "controversial". ^.~
     
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  18. Bluiechu -member- -member-

    Bluiechu
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 7:31 am

    Here's one of mine, called "Cookies"

    warnings, in case some of the things might offend some people: incest, boyxboy, mild language (very mild), angst that you could drown in, and generally messed up main characters. Some confusion ensues, but this story is still in the first editing stages and is going through major re-writes. Any suggestions would be great.

    http://www.geocities.com/desolation23/COOKIES.doc

    Sorry about the Word thing. *hides until someone reads it, feels embarassed for being proud of it*
     
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  19. gloombox -member- -member-

    gloombox
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 8:06 am

    Bluiechu, could you maybe chuck it in an LJ or something? ._.
     
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  20. flowersofnight -moderator- -moderator-

    flowersofnight
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    Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2004 8:31 am

    faith wrote:
    I just have to ask: is that glue trick based on any real-life practice? *flicks flecks of dirt off of face* *eyes wander over to glue*

    faith wrote:
    Good eye, good eye. I didn't think anyone noticed that one.
     
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